@ComfortableRaspberry - eviltoast
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    1 month ago

    Hängt für mich vom Szenario ab. Gibt heute immer noch Eltern die der Meinung sind man müsse das Kind notfalls zum Aufessen bringen oder andere mittlerweile erweisen schädliche Ansichten. Bin der Meinung, dass man sich da als Erwachsene Person durchaus einmischen darf. Es gibt zu viele Leute die glauben es sei allein ihre Sache, was sie mit ihrem Kindern tun. Das ist nicht korrekt.











  • Interesting idea so looking at the getting better part, some feedback:

    • Your sentences were quite long and hard to understand in one read. The last part was easiest to follow. Try simpler/shorter sentences and way less commas
    • 1 and 2 sound very neutral. This makes it less engaging for the reader, there was nothing much to relate to. The “this is communism” at the end of the Subway part was a good start. Share your thoughts and feelings more and reduce the objective descriptions.
    • Section one feels unfinished. What happened after? How did others react to your ideas? Why did you choose these requirements.

    Last but not least: the headline made me feel like I’m in aneurysm posting. The headline doesn’t have to give away everything, try to find a common denominator and again: less commas. If you need more that 2, your sentence starts to get complicated.

    Looking forward to read more about your days and give me a ping when you start mapping Germany, I can recommend a few dishes:D