Oh, the humanity! - eviltoast
  • Ms. ArmoredThirteen@lemmy.ml
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    4 months ago

    4/10. The immediate extreme response is a solid opener. I do like how you bring the entire fediverse into it which could broaden the appeal. However this is much too short and not nearly unhinged enough for a good copy pasta. Sentence structure is too proper, too. Maybe try some good run ons, add at least two more paragraphs, and include completely irrelevant topics with no attempt to link it to what you’re replying to. I’m proud of how well you do and think you can go places with some practice